tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8437027364305759283.post4053833741262942053..comments2023-05-05T02:19:21.766-07:00Comments on A Writer Writes . . . Sometimes: Getting rid of "wases"Donita K. Paulhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/09652376147614891898noreply@blogger.comBlogger1125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8437027364305759283.post-81049827252804496502011-03-31T20:23:05.594-07:002011-03-31T20:23:05.594-07:00Take 1-He knew, across the kitchen,the jacket upon...Take 1-He knew, across the kitchen,the jacket upon the back of the chair, held the square of cloth he wished to use within it's pocket.<br />Take 2- He knew the jacket, across the kitchen, held the square of cloth he wished to use within it's pocket.<br />Take 3- He'd left his jacket upon the back of a chair across the kitchen. He knew it's breast pocket, held the square of cloth he wished to use.<br />-No matter how hard I tried, I could not come up with something I liked. This sentence was annoying. I wanted to cut out some of the information that may not have been necessary, but it wasn't my story to tell. I couldn't decide what wasn't important. lol. Though I want to know what he wished to use the square of cloth for now.poetrygrl7https://www.blogger.com/profile/14353721651831278043noreply@blogger.com