Wednesday, September 15, 2010

Transition

finished Chapter 32!: 66,730 word count

Writing Tip: transition.
Effie has been under the barrage of several conflicting emotions as she talks to Old One. Quite suddenly she wants to change the subject and she says:
"Is Orli better this morning?"
But the shift is too sudden. The reader might get whiplash. So, I put an action tag before the dialog line.

Fleeing the emotions that confused her, she sought another subject. “Is Orli better this morning?”

12 comments:

  1. Thanks for this tip! I know exactly what story I can use this advice in.

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  2. I don't know where else to send this so...I picked up your book Dragons of the Valley and I love it. Great job, thank you and Wulder bless you.

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  3. Donita,
    My daughters and I are in the midst of reading Dragons of the Valley, and we love it! Thank you for sharing your wonderful imagination and writing with us.
    Hope you are having a Blessed Day!

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  4. Definitely something to show in an English lesson on transitions(we've been talking too much about them :/).

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  5. Thanks so much for stopping by my blog, Book Dreaming, and reading my review of Dragonspell. My son and I absolutely LOVED that series. It's one of my very favorites! :-)

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  6. I really enjoy your tips and I hope you begin to blog on here again :) thanks!

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  7. Transitions are pretty difficult for me. Thanks for sharing this!

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  8. very helpful. I think I'm good at transitions, but it's always great to get a reminder.


    http://acejournalist.blogspot.com/2011/01/tell-your-friends.html

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  9. That's my biggest struggle right now, in fact, in finshing my book. That and actually finishing it! Thanks.

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  10. That is a great tip, thanks for sharing:)

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  11. I'm having trouble writing the beginning of my fantasy novel, could you help me?

    Adress for my blog: mikaelasblogsmile.blogspot.com

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  12. i do not know were else to put this put is the chiril chron. on the color nook

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