Writing Tip:
The sentence was:
Hollee ran along the path beside the river and spotted two tumanhofers and two kimens. She ran back and bounced on the log that was Fenworth.
Two rans so close together is not good. And ran is so generic. So of course, I changed the verbs to something more visual.
Hollee zipped along the path beside the river and spotted two tumanhofers and two kimens. She raced back and bounced on the log that was Fenworth.
Mrs. Paul is a fantasy author and grandma. 
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yippee Fenworth!
ReplyDeleteZipped!
ReplyDeleteRaced!
Bounced!
So active, so fun!
Great post! Every time you aid us in your wisdom, we grow in our experience.
ReplyDeleteBouncy, bouncy, troncy, trounchy, full of fun fun fun!
ReplyDeleteBut the most wonderful thing about verbs are there's so much more than one!
Ah rewording. Such a tricky business...at least for me =) How do you come up with so many clever ways to say things?
ReplyDeleteI can't wait to read your next book!!