Monday, October 19, 2009

Sentence Fragment

Working on Chapter 27; 47,263 word count

Writing Tip: In writing fiction, the author is allowed to break rules once in a while. Below is a sentence fragment. The third "sometimes" is what the villain is anticipating, and therefore, more important. Set alone in a sentence fragment brings attention to this "sometimes."
This can also be achieved using ellipses . . . but that is not as strong as a clean break.

The pretty day would lure the lady from the inn. She often walked, sometimes with her husband and sometimes with the parrot. And sometimes alone.

4 comments:

  1. Freaky.... DON'T GO INTO THE INN!!!! *laughs* Very nice, Mrs. Paul.

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  2. (Gasps) What will happen NEXT!!

    TO BE CONTINUED.....

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  3. you all are very funny. You brighten my day with your comments.

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