finished 14, which was a really fun chapter; 27,346 word count
Writing Tip: In this chapter I had one character echo what was said by another character in a previous chapter. In the first, Bealomondore asked, "Do you know what I would like to do?" In this chapter, Efficinderpart asks the same exact question. Why does this work? These two characters are becoming friends. The repetition of the question establishes that they are beginning to feel a connection, they can banter, one recognizes the other will see this as an "inside" joke.
Repetition of a preposition idea:
The book landed flat and poofed the old flour up into the air.
Not good.
Repetition of a word:
He crouched as he approached the door. Effie also stooped as came to the door. Tak and Airon stayed at the back door and kept their eyes on the alley. Bealomondore manipulated the large dead bolt.
He crouched as he approached the door. Effie also stooped as she joined him. Tak and Airon stayed at the back and kept their eyes on the alley. Bealomondore manipulated the large dead bolt.
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What book is this from? Sounds familiar. I did just read Dragons of the Valley not too long ago. How exactly do you pronounce Bealomondore anyways? I stumbled over his name every time it popped up in the book. I always want to know the correct pronunciation. It drives me nuts when I don't. LOL
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